Calling yingjumeihua

Perspective

Reviewer: BeHappy

Title (10/10pts): The title gives an impression of something deep and melancholic, and that's the vibe the reader gets from the description as well. Great title choice!

Graphics/Trailer (10/5pts): I love, love, LOVED the poster! It had, like the title, a melancholic, sad, deep, feel to it, and the background matched too. Bonus on the graphics~

Description & Foreword (15/15pts): The "You never..." structure had its desired effect. The sentences were nice and short, but affected the reader. 

Characters (10/10pts): The victim played the role of the victim, and the others respectively. You did a great job portraying how each person felt!

Plot: Is it interesting? (Yes/No): The story was interesting, but I can't really say the plot was, because I couldn't really identify a plot. The story was more of a lesson on bullying, something for the reader to learn from and relate to.

Mechanics [Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Syntax, etc] (20/20pts): I didn't find anything wrong with spelling or grammar. 

Flow (10/10pts): The events transitioned smoothly into one another. I really liked how you included time and place in each part of your story! In a sense, it shows how bullying was different. 

Visual things (10/10pts): Perfect sized text, perfect poster colors, perfect background colors~! :D

Ending (15/15pts): Great ending for this particular type of story! I think hitting the enter bar a couple of times at the end to help spacing would be good though, just for visual purposes. 

Bonus (5/5pts possible): LOVED the graphics!

Extra Comments/Notes/Author's Comment:

I'm sooo sorry this took so long! School's been extremely busy this year. I really enjoyed your story though! It was beautifully written. And I think perhaps a chapter or sequel regarding cyberbullying would be nice too. :D

Total: 100/100 

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